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Some people think that e-books will eventually replace traditional paper-based books. Others, however, believe that both versions will continue to exist side by side. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Nowadays all
people
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are depended
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in
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 social nets, online games,
e-
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books
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and
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etc.
some
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 years earlier , all
people
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 used to read paper-based
books
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uses
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e-
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books
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, but not all of them. But in
whole
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 world have
a
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people
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 who don'
t
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 like reading any
types
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 of book.
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In
future
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the future
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e-
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books
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 will replace traditional paper-based
books
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. First of
all
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e-
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books
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 are comfortable and always under your hand.
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, nowadays we don'
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 have so many
writer
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such
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 in past In the past we had
a famous writers
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famous writers
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 like Alba Kunanbave,
whos
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 works are wore interesting to read
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, I think that
e-
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books
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a
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are a
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little bit uncomfortable to read.
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example
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in
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on
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 a long distance
trip
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 it hasn'
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 internet and charger. It will be hard to read to the full road.
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Thirdly
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,
the
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paper-based
books
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 aren'
t
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compaet
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compact
competent
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yourself
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you
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.
Made
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 the
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e-
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e-book
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books
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 sites
it
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was a great idea. I mentioned before it'salway by your hand You can an
everytime
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 can take and
you
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and read where you won’
t
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 But the big
disadventage
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disadvantage
 is that not everywhere you can charge your phone I definitely agree with that Most
of
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people
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the people
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 believe that
the
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both of ve ions will continue to exist Might be the paper-based versions will
be exist
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 but in my
opinion
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opinion,
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 all
people
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 will use
e-
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books
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. Because paper-based
books
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coast
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cost
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 a load of
woney
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money
honey
,
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books
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 of course
is
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wore
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are
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 cheaper.
Conclusion
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conclusion
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conclusion,
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 I
delide
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decided
decide
 that after 5 to 10 years will be
the
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a
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less
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smaller
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 number of
people
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 who will like reading
still
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apply
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Maybe none of them will use
e-
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books
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 but the fewest will read paper-based
version
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versions
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.

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Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear and logical structure, which makes it difficult for the reader to follow your arguments. Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and that paragraphs logically follow each other to build your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include a clear introduction and conclusion to frame your essay properly. The introduction should clearly state the topic and your main points, while the conclusion should summarize your arguments and restate your opinion.
Coherence & Cohesion
Support your main points with specific examples or evidence. This helps to strengthen your arguments and make them more convincing.
Task Achievement
Ensure that you address the task fully by discussing both views presented in the prompt and giving your own opinion. Each view should be explored thoroughly with relevant supporting details.
Task Achievement
Your ideas need to be expressed more clearly and comprehensively. Avoid vague statements and ensure that your points are developed fully.
Task Achievement
Use specific examples to support your arguments. Examples should be relevant and help to illustrate the point you're making. Avoid general statements without backing them up with details.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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