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he diagrams illustrate the blueprint for a wave-energy machine and the place where to build it

he diagrams illustrate the blueprint for a wave-energy machine and the place where to build it
The given
ımages
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images
 show the blueprint for a
wave
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-
energy
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machine
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 and two different options in which
this
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machine
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 would
be construct
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.
Overall
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, the first image shows the mechanism of a man-made
machine
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 which produces
energy
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 from waves, and the second figure compares two location alternatives, where
this
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machine
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 could be placed. As seen in the first image, the man-made
machine
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 utilizes
wave
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movement
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 in order to generate
energy
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. When the
wave
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 moves toward
into
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the
machine
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, air flow goes
to
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upward and
this
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movement
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 activates
turbinues
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turbines
. The same
principal
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principle
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 is true for the time when the
wave
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 turns back, with just one difference (when the
wave
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 recedes the air moves toward
into
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the chamber and
turbunies
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turbines
turbine
 rotate again). It can be said that the
wave
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movement
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 both to and from the chamber leads to a constant
movement
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 and rotation
for
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of
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 turbines and
generate
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generates
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energy
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 from
wave
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movement
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. As shown in the second image,
it is clear that
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 when the mechanism is placed in the deeper part of the sea, more
energy
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 is produced compared to a mechanism which is in the shallow land. Since larger waves exist in the deeper area than the coastal side of the sea.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, energy, wave, movement with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 8 times.
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