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The pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The image illustrates the steps that are followed in order to make Ketchup. The sauce
require
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 many steps during the process of making it. From the moment the
tamatoes
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tomatoes
 are picked until you have
it
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them
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 in your house, there are 15 things to do. First of all the farmer picks the tomatoes and
put
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then
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 into a basket.
Secondly
, the best
tomatoe
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tomatoes
tomato
 are selected to be sent to the factory. Once they are there, the workers take out the stalk, skin and seeds. After that, they crush the fruit inside a container until
create
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 a liquid. At
this
point
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 some ingredients,
such
 as sugar, vinegar and salt are added.
Last
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 point of making the ketchup is boiling it and
then
,
leave
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 it for two hours. When the ketchup is made It starts the process of packing it. It is put into bottles.
Then
 all the bottles pass a quality control in order to see if everything is okay.
Finally
, the product is put into boxes and these ones are sent to the supermarkets
,
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 so that customers can buy it. In conclusion, it takes a long time
producing
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this
 sauce, and
manly
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many
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 workers take part in it, and
as a
result
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result,
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 a good quality product is made.
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Language Use
Be cautious with spelling errors such as 'tamatoes', which should be spelled as 'tomatoes', and other inaccuracies in word choice. Maintain the formal tone expected of academic writing in IELTS. For example, the casual phrasing 'the best tomatoe are selected to be sent to the factory' could be replaced with 'the highest quality tomatoes are selected for factory processing'.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report lacks an overarching structure that clearly introduces the topic, outlines the main ideas and features of the process, and provides a conclusive statement. Including a more explicit introduction and conclusion would enhance the report's effectiveness. It is also essential to ensure that each stage of the process is explained in a clear and logical order.
Task Achievement
While you have attempted to respond to the task, there is room for improvement regarding task achievement. Ensure that all parts of the process are completely and accurately described. Additional details and examples would enrich the report, providing clarity and depth to the explanation of the ketchup-making process.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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