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In today's fast-pace world, many individuals struggle with delaying or postponng tasks What are the causes and what can be done to solve this?

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In
this
 day and age, many
people
 are dealing
withthe
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with the
with
 procrastination.
This
 problem is attributable to
the
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distraction and mismanagement
in
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 work, yet it can be addressed by rescheduling
timetable
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. The underlying root of the problem is almost always the interference from the society.
In other words
,
people
priotize
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prioritise
 their hobbies and waste too much
time
for
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it
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.
Conseqently
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Consequently
, they fail to concentrate on the tasks
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 leads to procrastination. In turn,
people
 are more likely to be engaged with the pastime
such
 as video games or chatting and they don't realize how much
time
 has been used for entertainment. Taking Vietnamese students as an example, where smartphone addiction is the main factor for delaying homework. Another principal cause for postponing tasks is the lack of management in
working
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 timetable. It must be recognised that individuals prefer solving easy
promblems
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problems
 to dealing with difficulties.
Thus
, they don't have enough
time
 left to finish the goals
due to
 the imbalance in
time
spending
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 on work. If
people
 spend
time
 on their tasks equally, they will get in trouble with finding
solution
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 for the complicated ones.
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Perhaps
 a solution to the problem of
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procrastination can be found in the form of making a clear plan for working.
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 most effective approach is to take notes of works
then
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 make
sitable
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suitable
stable
 schemes for them. If
people
 have a
fully-preparation
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full preparation
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 for what they are going to do,
individual
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individuals
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 will spend
time
 on hobbies and work logically.
As a result
,
people
priotize
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prioritise
 the most important mission and finish it in
time
. Sweeden is a prime example here where citizens always go to the meeting place 5 minutes early to get ready because they know how to make a good plan. In
clusion
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conclusion
,
procrationation
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procrastination
 stems from
the
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interference and the lack of
time
 management.
However
, rescheduling
timetable
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the timetable
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 will stop delaying and postponing missions.
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