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The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line charts provide information about the
percentage
 of the total people who live in four different countries in
Asian
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Asia
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 between 1970 and 2040.
Overall
, most the countries
were
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increased throughout
of
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apply
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the period. If we look in
details
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detail
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, the
percentage
people
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of people
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 in Indonesia and Thailand were 15 and 20 per
cent
 respectively in 1970.
Then
, both graphs illustrated
increase
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 to the peak
percentage
 by the end of the year approximately 50 and 40 per
cent
. Population in Malaysia,
it
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started at 30 per
cent
 in 1970. The trend compared to the
percentage
 in two other countries in
Asian
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Asia
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 which were Indonesia and Thailand were almost in the same
percentage
along
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over
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 the year. In the future, the projection of population in Malaysia will rise to the highest amount at 80 per
cent
.
Furthermore
, the growth
percentage
 of people in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 started in the highest
percentage
 in 1970. Since 1980, the
percentage
 significantly increased almost
double
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doubling
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 in the next 10 years.
Nevertheless
, in the next 20
years
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years,
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 the
percentage
 declined
more
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by more
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 or less 40 per
cent
. After that, the
percentage
 will increase to the peak amount by the end of
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the years
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years
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year
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 10 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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