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The bar chart shows the proportion of people aged over 65 years old in Germany, Canada, and the UK over a period of 50 years.

The bar chart shows the proportion of people aged over 65 years old in Germany, Canada, and the UK over a period of 50 years.
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The bar chart compares three different countries, including
Canada
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,
Germany
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 and the
UK
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 in terms of the percentage of the population over 65 years old within the timespan of 50 years, commencing from 1980.
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, what stands out from the graph is that there are increases in the proportion of all three countries. Another striking feature is that
Germany
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 is expected to have the highest proportion. In 1980, the percentage of the population aged 65 or over in
Canada
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 was only 10%, compared to around 14% in the
UK
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 and 15% in
Germany
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. Over the following 20 years,
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 the figure for
Germany
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 still remained the highest, with 20%, that of
Canada
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 and the
UK
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 was the same, 15% for each. By 2030, the proportion of people aged 65 or over in
Germany
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 is expected to be the highest, with 25%, exceeding that of the
UK
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, with a mere 17%. In the same period, the statistic for
Canada
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 is predicted to rise to around 22%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, germany, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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