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The line graph shows the proportion of students aged 18-25 studying in the universities of Singapore, Malaysia, Philippines and Thailand from 1961 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the proportion of students aged 18-25 studying in the universities of Singapore, Malaysia, Philippines and Thailand from 1961 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph depicts the percentage of university
students
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 in the age range of 18-25 in Singapore, Malaysia,
Philippines
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, and Thailand from 1961 to 2011.
To begin
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 with, in Malaysia, there
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 a gradual and quick increase up until 1971.
However
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, beyond
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 we can observe a less steeper increase.
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, Thailand was at an all-time high for the percentage of university
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, until 1967
where
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when
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 they lost their title of number one to Singapore. Despite that, they gained it back later, when a huge
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 happened
on
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 1991 and they shot right above Singapore
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in
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 2011.
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, on the lower end of percentages,
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 was struggling to increase their number of
students
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 right before 1971, in which they experienced a slight rise in
students
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. Unfortunately,
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Philippines'
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the Philippines'
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 line graph flat-lines around 1991. To sum it up, the
overall
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 trend of university
students
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 is getting higher by the year. Especially in Thailand where the projections seem very promising. Unlike
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 whose percentages are unexpected to go up.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, philippines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • higher education
  • trend
  • contrast
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • plateau
  • governmental policies
  • economic situations
  • cultural attitudes
  • education growth
  • correlation
  • historical events
  • political events
  • projection
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