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The chart below shows the resultsof a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the resultsof a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of city residents on three
way
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ways
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 of buying and drinking
coffee
 and tea
accourding
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according
 to a survey in five cities in Australia in
last
 4 weeks. In general, most people rather
to
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go to a café,
while
 the least popular
way
 is to buy fresh
coffee
.
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According
 to the figure, the highest percentage of
the
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apply
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individuals who prefer café is for Melburne and Hubert
by
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about 63%, and the lowest is for Adelaide
by
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less than 50%.
However
, buying instant
coffee
 is the
secound
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second
 most
refered
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referred
way
, mostly in Hobart by around 55%, and
leastly
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least
 in Sydney by 46%.
On the other
hand
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hand,
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 fewer residents prefer buying fresh
coffee
.
for instance
, in
Brisbane
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Brisbane,
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 less than 35% bought fresh
coffee
. The order of
preferance
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preference
 is the same in
four
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the four
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 cities, but in
Adelaids
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Adelaide
 the most
preferd
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preferred
way
 is buying instant
coffe
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coffee
by
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at
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 50% and going to the café is in
secound
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second
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percent
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per cent
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fewer
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less
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.
Overall
 city residents prefer to have prepared
coffee
instead
 of providing it by
theirselves
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themselves
show examples
.
Submitted by Farzaneh Ka on

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words way, coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption patterns
  • Predominance
  • Demographics
  • External factors
  • Seasonality
  • Cultural influences
  • Health benefits
  • Caffeine content
  • Social settings
  • Expenditure
  • Survey data
  • Consumer behavior
  • Taste preferences
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