Some think that some individuals are naturally good leaders while others think individuals can learn leadership skills. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Few
people
believe that individuals intrinsically have the trait to be good leaders when there are
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of
people
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that leadership skills must be learned.
While
common
people
do have
thier
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their
own natural abilities that
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to attaining great leading qualities . I believe that humans have the capacity to work hard and absorb new techniques through experiences . Numerous living examples where they have had
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ideal
leading
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skill
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,
have
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run , taken care of and promoted many excellent programmes during
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contingency are present.
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is demands
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innate qualities, that can be witnessed
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leaders. For
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, I observe these traits in children of politicians, because they are
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the in the kind of rearing environment since childhood which enhances
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decision-making
, and executive knowledge
lead
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.
On the other hand
, candidates who have had a formal education
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studied for the
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specific subject and had immersive involvement in the field were noted to be good.
This
can bring new fresh minds into the pool of existing
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peers.
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, A friend of mine was elected as the sub-committee head by a democratic vote. Young and old
people
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him as he showcased himself in dire situations to
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be
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helpful. In conclusion,
although
good leaders are inborn
in particular
spaces, the underdog must not be ignored as they are quick to grab
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concepts and
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Please ensure your introduction clearly states the views being discussed; avoid vague and general statements. Aim for a concise explanation of the main points that will be discussed in the essay.
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The main body paragraphs should each focus on discussing one view fully before moving onto the next. This helps with coherence and ensuring that each viewpoint is given adequate attention.
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Concrete, relevant examples should be provided to support the claims made about each viewpoint. Examples are critical to illustrate and reinforce your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should have a clear main idea followed by supporting sentences. Avoid merging several ideas without clear transitions or explanations.
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Use a range of linking words and phrases to show the relationship between ideas, and to guide the reader through your argument. This will improve the logical flow of your essay.
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Ensure that your conclusion summarizes the points made in the essay and reflects back on the introduction. Restate your opinion clearly in the conclusion to reinforce your argument.

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