Topic: We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?

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Nowadays, almost of human activities use
technology
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to ease working, learning, having
vacation
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vacations

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, and
the
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others. Applying
technology
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is equal
with
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to

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the development of
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computer
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computers

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, so we can call
this
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issue
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computer based
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computer-based

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technology
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. I imagine that someday all
of
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human
aspect
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aspects

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will be supported by
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computer
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computers

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based
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.
However
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,
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people
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people's

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role
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roles

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must
be exist
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to be guidance. 
Computer
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-based technologies are technologies that implement
computer
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algorithm
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algorithms

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to make human
works
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work

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is
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solved easily. We can imagine the period when
human
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humans

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live
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lived

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without
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computer
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computers

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or
technology
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, that time,
people
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did their
problem
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problems

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effectiveless
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effectiveness
effectively

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.
For example
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,
people
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who
wanted
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want

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to go shopping must
went
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to the shopping outlet directly. So,
people
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would
spended
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spend

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their time on the way to the outlet. But now, societies can buy clothes that they want in e-commerce or order by social media. In Indonesia,
School
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Schools

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,
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and University
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and University

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University
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Universities
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implent
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implement
implant

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the
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computer
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technology
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to deliver
the
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knowledge to their students. In
another place
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other places

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like
private
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the private

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sector or industries, the managers and their staff
held
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hold

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meeting
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meetings

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by
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with

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computer based
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computer-based

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technology
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that
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called video conferences. Based on
these sample
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these samples

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, we get the information that
computer
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technology
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are
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is

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implented
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implemented
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in several sectors.
However
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, the implementation in
government
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the government

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sector is not implemented well. There are many services based on
manual
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manually

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such
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as
election
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the election

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of president and
admistration
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administration

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in villages. But I think in the future the implementation of
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computer
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computers

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will
be
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increase and reach all of life aspects.
On the other hand
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, using
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computer
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computers

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to
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too

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much is not good for our health. So, we need some policies to restrict the
using
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use of

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these technologies.
To sum up
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,
computer
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technology
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is
technology
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that
implement
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is implemented

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in almost
of
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all of

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life aspects. I feel that societies will
adapt
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adopt

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computer
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technology
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in
whole
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aspect. The
technology
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must
be guide
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by policies to make our
body
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bodies

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healthy.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that supporting sentences are relevant and well-developed. Use a range of linking words to connect ideas more effectively.
task achievement
Make sure to fully address all parts of the task, presenting a clear position throughout the essay. Develop your main ideas fully with extended and well-supported points.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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