Topic: We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?
Nowadays, almost of human activities use
technology
to ease working, learning, having vacation
, and Fix the agreement mistake
vacations
the
others. Applying Correct article usage
apply
technology
is equal with
the development of Change preposition
to
computer
, so we can call Fix the agreement mistake
computers
this
issue computer based
Add a hyphen
computer-based
technology
. I imagine that someday all of
human Change preposition
apply
aspect
will be supported by Fix the agreement mistake
aspects
computer
Fix the agreement mistake
computers
based
. Verb problem
apply
However
, people
Change noun form
people's
role
must Fix the agreement mistake
roles
be exist
to be guidance.
Change the verb form
exist
Computer
-based technologies are technologies that implement computer
algorithm
to make human Fix the agreement mistake
algorithms
works
Fix the agreement mistake
work
is
solved easily. We can imagine the period when Unnecessary verb
apply
human
Fix the agreement mistake
humans
live
without Wrong verb form
lived
computer
or Fix the agreement mistake
computers
technology
, that time, people
did their problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
effectiveless
. Correct your spelling
effectiveness
effectively
For example
, people
who wanted
to go shopping must Wrong verb form
want
went
to the shopping outlet directly. So, Change the verb form
go
people
would spended
their time on the way to the outlet. But now, societies can buy clothes that they want in e-commerce or order by social media.
In Indonesia, Correct your spelling
spend
School
, Fix the agreement mistake
Schools
Correct word choice
and University
University
Fix the agreement mistake
Universities
implent
Correct your spelling
implement
implant
the
Correct article usage
apply
computer
technology
to deliver the
knowledge to their students. In Correct article usage
apply
another place
like Fix the agreement mistake
other places
private
sector or industries, the managers and their staff Correct article usage
the private
held
Wrong verb form
hold
meeting
Fix the agreement mistake
meetings
by
Change preposition
with
computer based
Add a hyphen
computer-based
technology
that
called video conferences. Based on Correct pronoun usage
apply
these sample
, we get the information that Change the determiner
this sample
these samples
computer
technology
are
Change the verb form
is
implented
in several sectors. Correct your spelling
implemented
implanted
However
, the implementation in government
sector is not implemented well. There are many services based on Add an article
the government
manual
Change the word
manually
such
as election
of president and Add an article
the election
admistration
in villages. But I think in the future the implementation of Correct your spelling
administration
computer
will Fix the agreement mistake
computers
be
increase and reach all of life aspects. Unnecessary verb
apply
On the other hand
, using computer
Fix the agreement mistake
computers
to
much is not good for our health. So, we need some policies to restrict the Replace the word
too
using
these technologies.
Wrong verb form
use of
To sum up
, computer
technology
is technology
that implement
in almost Wrong verb form
is implemented
of
life aspects. I feel that societies will Correct determiner usage
all of
adapt
Correct your spelling
adopt
computer
technology
in whole
aspect. The Change the article
the whole
technology
must be guide
by policies to make our Change the verb form
be guided
body
healthy.Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
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