THE CHARTS BELOW SHOW THE PERCENTAGE OF VOUNTEERS BY ORGANIZATIONS IN 2008 AND 2014

THE CHARTS BELOW SHOW THE PERCENTAGE OF VOUNTEERS BY ORGANIZATIONS IN 2008 AND 2014
The given pie charts
demonstrates
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the transitions of
volunteer
proportion in
remaining
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the remaining
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association (environment, art,
sport
,
health
care
,
educational
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and others) between 2008 and 2014.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that several
volunteer
percentages experienced a significant decrease in each
organizations
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,
while
the other
group
provide
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the best
transform
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from 2008 to 2014.
however
,
sport
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organizations
presents
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the
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apply
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wide differences in
volunteer
percent
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overthrough
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over through
overthrow
the other
group
. In terms of the volunteers whose
entertain
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in environmental,
sport
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sports
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and
health
care
organizations
was
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experienced a slight
rose
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in the next year.
Sport
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group
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total
percent
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in 2014 increased significantly by 10%,
it
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then
similarly
with environmental and
health
care
proportion
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proportions
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which upward slightly from 21 % and 7% to 29% and 8% respectively.
However
,
it is clear that
the biggest main changes over the
organizations
per
volunteer
was
sport
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organization and the least was
health
care
volunteer
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volunteers
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. Regarding the other percentages of
volunteer
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volunteers
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in each association that
provide
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decline
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a decline
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total
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percentages in two different
year
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,
that is Art
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the art
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, educational and
other
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another group
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group
that was witnessed a significant decline from 2008 to 2014.
Moreover
, art and other
organizations
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organizations'
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total
volunteer
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volunteers
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was demonstrates
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the
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apply
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similar total changes
by
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6
percent
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between 2008 and 2014.
Besides
,
educational
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was the main organization was experienced
a
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biggest decrease in the next year from 24% to 7%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words volunteer, sport, health, care, organizations, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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