THE CHARTS BELOW SHOW THE PERCENTAGE OF VOUNTEERS BY ORGANIZATIONS IN 2008 AND 2014

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the transitions of

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proportion in

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association (environment, art,

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health

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care

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educational

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and others) between 2008 and 2014.

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percentages experienced a significant decrease in each

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organizations

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from 2008 to 2014.

however

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sport

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wide differences in

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. In terms of the volunteers whose

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in environmental,

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and

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care

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experienced a slight

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in the next year.

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group

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total

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in 2014 increased significantly by 10%,

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then

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with environmental and

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proportion

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which upward slightly from 21 % and 7% to 29% and 8% respectively.

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it is clear that

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the biggest main changes over the

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sport

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organization and the least was

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. Regarding the other percentages of

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in each association that

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total

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percentages in two different

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that is Art

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, educational and

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that was witnessed a significant decline from 2008 to 2014.

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, art and other

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organizations

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total

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the

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similar total changes

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percent

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between 2008 and 2014.

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was the main organization was experienced

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biggest decrease in the next year from 24% to 7%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words volunteer, sport, health, care, organizations, group with synonyms.

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Overall Band Score

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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THE CHARTS BELOW SHOW THE PERCENTAGE OF VOUNTEERS BY ORGANIZATIONS IN 2008 AND 2014

Governments should focus their spending on public services rather than on the art (e.g. Music and painting). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Kids are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

Nowadays people are living increasing an increasing longer life and in many countries, there are more old people than young people. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Nowadays,many people choose to be self-employed, than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?