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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #cost #fuel
At present many
community
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communities
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 believe that increasing the price of fuel is an efficient way to cope with environmental
problems
.
However
, these
problems
 appear every day. Everything has its own advantages and disadvantages and,
similarly
 is the case with the increase in ammunition price.
On the other
hand
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 there is a clear argument that
,
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the world has been struggling for centuries with fuel.
This
 is one of the main
problems
 occurring in every country.
For example
, In India and Pakistan, the economic situation has been weakening over the past 3 years.
This
 means that the world is going to significantly increase
also
 it could be unhealthy to live in.
Nevertheless
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 I totally agree with the
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this
 statement that there are many issues
make
Verb problem
that cause
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problems
 in our environment. I propose one of the ways to improve the economic situation.
For instance
, planting new forests and making changes to forest management can help forests take more carbon dioxide out of the atmosphere. On farms, the amount of carbon stored in the soil can be increased by growing cover crops, adding manure or compost to fields, and reducing the amount that fields are tilled.
In
addition
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 the weakening of the economic situation can lead to natural disasters.
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