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The diagram below shows how a central heating system in a house works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how a central heating system in a house works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Many houses managed to get heated by
central
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the central
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 heating system. If you construct it correctly it will always
works
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 correctly.
It's
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Its
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 mechanism is very simple.
Firstly
, cold
water
 gets into the
house
by
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tubes
 and collects in
water
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the water
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 tank, which fills
storage
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the storage
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 tank
by
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with
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 the overflow pipe. At
this
 time storage tank
send
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sends
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 collected
water
 to the boiler. It's important to choose correctly
water
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a water
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 boiler
,
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apply
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 because there is
a
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apply
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2 types of it, gas and oil. The
house
contructors
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contractors
constructors
 set
water
tubes
 at the beginning of the
constructing
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 jobs.
Also
, they deploy and connect the hot
water
 radiators,
which
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whose
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 main job is to heat the
house
. When
boiler
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the boiler
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 heated up the
water
 to 100 degrees by Celsium,
electric
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the electric
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 pump
runs
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ran
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 the
water
 into the
tubes
. Former hot
water
 from the
last
 heating season
is substitutes
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is substituted
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 by the "new" heated
water
. Radiators, which
is
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are
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 connected to the
tubes
, get warmer with the temperature of
water
 and start to
heating
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heat
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 the
house
. It is the all steps of how a central heating system in a
house
 works. There are many other mechanisms that can heat up the
house
, but
this
 way is the most popular.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, house, tubes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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