The diagram below shows how a central heating system in a house works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how a central heating system in a house works.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Many houses managed to get heated by
central
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the central
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heating system. If you construct it correctly it will always
works
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correctly.
It's
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mechanism is very simple.
Firstly
, cold
water
gets into the
house
by
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tubes
and collects in
water
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the water
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tank, which fills
storage
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tank
by
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the overflow pipe. At
this
time storage tank
send
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collected
water
to the boiler. It's important to choose correctly
water
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boiler
,
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because there is
a
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apply
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2 types of it, gas and oil. The
house
contructors
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contractors
constructors
set
water
tubes
at the beginning of the
constructing
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jobs.
Also
, they deploy and connect the hot
water
radiators,
which
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main job is to heat the
house
. When
boiler
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the boiler
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heated up the
water
to 100 degrees by Celsium,
electric
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pump
runs
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the
water
into the
tubes
. Former hot
water
from the
last
heating season
is substitutes
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by the "new" heated
water
. Radiators, which
is
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are
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connected to the
tubes
, get warmer with the temperature of
water
and start to
heating
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heat
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the
house
. It is the all steps of how a central heating system in a
house
works. There are many other mechanisms that can heat up the
house
, but
this
way is the most popular.
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