The diagram below shows the stages and equipement used in the cement-making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagram below shows the stages and equipement used in the cement-making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The graph illustrates the process
to make
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of making
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cement
and how
to
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cement
is used for concrete production .
Overall
, there are 5 main stages to make
cement
and 4 materials to make concrete for construction
purpose
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purposes
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.
Firstly
, to produce
cement
first
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apply
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the limestone and clay are crushed and the produced powder from
this
is passed through a mixer .After that, the powder is
passing
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passed
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via a rotating heater where heat is supplied continuously,
this
process
made
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makes
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the mixture.
Then
, the mixture
passed
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is passed
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on a grinder machine in order to produce
cement
.
Finally
, the
cement
is
packaging
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packaged
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for
sales
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sale
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. The second diagram
present
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how concrete
produced
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is produced
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for housing and industry work . In the first step,
one fifths
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cement
, one
tens
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ten
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of water,
quarter
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a quarter
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sand
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of sand
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and half small stones are mixed in a concrete mixer
togher
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together
to create the
concreate
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concrete
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.
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