The charts show information about the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000

The charts show information about the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000
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The bar charts display information about the
percentage
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of
employment
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for
men
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and
women
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aged
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60-64, in four different countries in the years 1970 and 2000.
Overall
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, it is readily apparent that the
USA
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had the highest
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of
employment
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for
men
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in both years. There is not a significant difference in the
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rate for
men
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between
Belgium
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and
Japan
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in 1970 and 2000.
However
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, there is a huge contrast for
women
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in 2000 between the two countries. In 1970, the proportion of
men
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employed in all four countries was not considerable. The highest being 88% in the
USA
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, following 85% in Indonesia.
In addition
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,
Belgium
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has a 79% rate and
Japan
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has a minimum of 75%.
In contrast
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, the highest
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of
employment
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for
women
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was 64% and 63% respectively.
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, the lowest
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of
women
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was in
Japan
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at 55% In 2000,
men
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had the greatest
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in the
USA
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(80%) and
Japan
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being the least (52%)
As well as
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Belgium
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and Indonesia were at 52% and 71% respectively. In comparison,
women
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's
employment
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rate decreased by the year 2000.
Japan
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and Indonesia had similar figures (48% and 50%)
whereas
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, the
USA
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was at 42%.
Furthermore
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,
Belgium
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was reported as having the lowest
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figure by the year 2000 at 9% for both
men
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and
women
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.
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