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nowadays global warming change alot so what cause this problem and give effective solution

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Global warming has been a threat to the
enivronment
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environment
 for quite some time, and we have taken steps to control it but they are not as effective in
real
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 world as they were in papers. Global warming is known as
raise
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rise
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 in the global
temprature
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temperature
due to
 greenhouse
gases
 and
pollution
. Global warming is caused by harmful
gases
 emitted by cars,industries,deforestation and many other sources. There has been a steady increase in the automobile industry leading to more cars on the road which has the consequence of
increase
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the increase
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 in
pollution
 levels,
the
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cars have been installed with
pollution
 control but they do affect the environment at a higher level. Next up is industries, unvarying growth in industry
developement
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development
 has resulted in GDP growth of the country but it
also
 contributes
in
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 provoking the
pollution
 levels, the hazardous
gases
 released in the
air
has
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 an immense effect on the atmosphere and
creates
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 a toxic
air
 to breathe. The
air
 quality index in certain parts of the globe has reached 340 which is equal to smoking 30 cigars per day.
Last
 but not
the
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least is deforestation, the average forest area in the globe has seen a great fall resulting in loss of rainfall,shelter for wild animals and droughts.
Solution
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 for
this
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 causes are simple yet difficult to follow
,
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 because we are highly dependent on advanced technologies. Switching to EV vehicles is one of the best options available in the market as
its
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 a sustainable and less harmful to the environment, the
gases
 released in the
air
 by the industries should go through a cleaning process and must be monitored
throughly
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thoroughly
through
 before emitting in the atmosphere. Plantation of trees must be encouraged in schools and colleges, plantation drives must be organised frequently to create a safe and clean environment To sum it up, global warming is hazardous and might create a troublesome lifestyle for the upcoming generation.
Thus
 by adopting sustainable and renewable sources in our daily lives, we could make a big difference for them. Every small change in our lifestyle could save our planet from burning.
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Address all parts of the task. Make sure that the response forms a complete answer to the question asked, including the causes and effective solutions to global warming. Elaborate your ideas distinctly and back them up with specific, relevant examples. Avoid general statements.

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