Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some say that the most important course at school is
History
, while
others would argue that Science
and Technology
classes
are more important. This
essay will argue that although
history
can tell us about the past, science
and technology
expand childrens'
creativity.
On the one hand, Change noun form
children's
history
classes
allow people
to know about what happened in the past. Children should study this
subject because they will learn about what happened in the past centuries in their country or even in the world. Furthermore
, History
Change preposition
in History
classes
people
learn about the culture and religions of other nations and gives answer to many questions that people
might have about why the world is like this
; the conflicts and the relationship between nations. For instance
, the recent war between Israel and Palestine is caused by conflicts that they had from decades and centuries ago, so if people
do not knew
Change the verb form
know
history
could not
understand the reason why they are fighting. Wrong verb form
cannot
However
, I believe that looking foward
to the future is more important than understanding the past.
Correct your spelling
forward
On the other hand
, Science
and Technology
are subjects which extend people
's creativity. In Science
courses, students
are taught about how things in the
nature and in their body Correct article usage
apply
works
, Change the verb form
work
as well as
inventions and discoveries. In these classes
, students
need to make experiements
to find out how to create or make a certain element. Correct your spelling
experiments
Moreover
, in technology
classes
, children are taught about the inventions, how they were created and why they are useful, also
, students
may create their own robot or machine and programe
it, so it can be used. Recent research done in Spain concluded that Correct your spelling
program
students
who studied science
were more imaginative than those who didn't. In my opinon
, these subjects will help Correct your spelling
opinion
students
to have a better future, since creativity is an important area not only for school,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
for work.
In conclusion, although
in history
classes
people
learn about the past, science
and technology
allow individuals to be more creative, and this
is why, I think that science
and technology
are more important subjects.Submitted by elenazheng1211 on
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Ensure that your ideas are fully developed and extended with specific details and examples. Some explanations lack depth and require further elaboration.
coherence cohesion
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task achievement
Review your essay for clarity to ensure that your standpoint and arguments are easily understandable without ambiguities.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to precision in your language, as some expressions (e.g., 'people could not knew') exhibit grammatical inaccuracies.
Your opinion
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