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In today’s society, both Western medicine and traditional complementary forms of medicines’ are now widely known and used. The effectiveness of these kinds of treatment is determined by the patient’s mental attitude towards it. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, Biomedicine and customary medicine
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 spread widely. The effect of the use is controlled by the sick person’s mental stability. I strongly agree that the outcomes of medicine totally depend on the
patients
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 approach.
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, the person who is sick has to trust in any form of medication that
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 are receiving. When a
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 mind tells them that the pills they are taking can heal them, it is registered in their brains.
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 as pills are being sold, they have a clear picture of how fast the healing will take place, by so doing
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 it gives a clear overview of the mechanism of the treatment.
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 the effectiveness is determined by the
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.
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people give
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 on
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traditional medicine the more we humans consider it helpful. When
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 of individuals
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clear feedback towards certain methods of treatment, it gives patients a heads-up.
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, the study of Malawi
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 showed that traditional methods mainly
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 views before proceeding and by doing
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 it builds confidence and trust. For that reason, it is the victim’s point of view that helps with the recovery. In conclusion,
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 attitude towards any approach of medications
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recovery,
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 l strongly agree.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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