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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps below illustrate the layout of a
sport
centre
 in a university, before and after development.
Overall
, the central area will remain the same, the changes
well
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will
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 mainly be made on both sides of the
sport
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sports
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centre
 and the place will be bigger. All the
area
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areas
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 inside the
sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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 will remain the same, but the outdoor courts will be removed,
instead
, the
centre
 will be larger. The gym will be
extented
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extended
to almost the end of the right corner of the
centre
, where there will be two dance studios. Between the seating area and the dance studio, there will be a
sport
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sports
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 hall, in the
south east
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southeast
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 corner a new changing room will be developed too. On the
right hand
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 side of the
entrance
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 there will be a café.
Furthermore
, the outdoor courts
in
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on
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 the west side will be changed to a leisure pool with a changing room just
at
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apply
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the
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apply
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south of it, next to a
sport
 shop.
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Ensure that the essay has a clear logical structure, with distinct paragraphs that each cover separate elements of the comparison. Use a wider range of cohesion devices to help better connect ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
For task achievement, ensure that you provide a more in-depth explanation of the changes being made, including all significant developments, and make clear comparisons where necessary. Avoid vague language and strive for specificity to improve clarity.

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