University students should pay the full cost of their studies because university education benefits individuals rather than the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some
people
agured
that Correct your spelling
argue
study
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studying
in
University should pay Change preposition
at
for
Change preposition
apply
their
full cost because the benefits of Change the word
the
study
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studying
does
not Change the verb form
do
helped
Change the verb form
help
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
. I do not agree
the Add the preposition
agree on
agree to
agree with
statment
because each subject Correct your spelling
statement
is help improving
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helps improve
society
and if students have to pay for full price it will reduce percentage
of Add an article
the percentage
student
.
Fix the agreement mistake
students
The climate
Correct article usage
Climate
changing
is the biggest problem in our Replace the word
change
society
. The Earth is getting warmer and warmer, and most ice is melted. The people
who did study
about enviroment
realized how serious the problem Correct your spelling
environment
is
and started to tell Wrong verb form
was
people
and published it to public
. If Correct article usage
the public
people
did not study
it I think until now we still do not know what is the problem to cause the climate change. For example
, we know we can use transport instead
to use
our own Change preposition
of using
vehicle
so we can reduce pollution to make our Air much Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
more
clearer.
The cost of life is getting expensive. If colleges are Change the word
apply
ask
for Wrong verb form
asked
the
full payment Correct article usage
apply
of
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for
study
most of
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apply
people
will prefer
start to work Add the particle
prefer to
instead
study
. The knowledge lever will be limited. Change preposition
of study
For example
, people
will just follow old fashion and won not
think big.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
won't
people
try to improve their knowledge it is not only for themselves also
Correct word choice
but also
benefits
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benefit
for
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apply
society
and each of us. I do think encourage
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encouraging
people
to study
and do
not charge is more Unnecessary verb
apply
importantly
to keep them Change the word
important
out of
improving their skills.Change preposition
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