The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line charts represent the washing
machine
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,
refrigator
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refrigerator
, and
vacuum
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cleaner change in ownership and how
many
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much
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time
have been
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was
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spent in
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household
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the household
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doing
housework
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in a specific country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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all
of
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apply
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three electrical products experienced an upward
trends
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trend
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,
while
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the number of
hours
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of
housework
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per
week
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in
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household
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households
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decline
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declined
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over the years. The
refrigator
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refrigerator
start
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started
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on
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at
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the lowest point apart from the other two, which is no one individuals
have
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had
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that thing in 1920,
whereas
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at
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in
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the same year, two-fifths of
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household
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households
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used
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the machine
a machine
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machine
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machines
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to wash clothes and nearly a third of
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household
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households
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used
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use
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of
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apply
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vacuum
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the vacuum
a vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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.
Additionally
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, the washing
machine
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,
refrigator
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refrigerator
, and
vacuum
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cleaner almost met
at
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apply
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the same ratio in 1940 with 60%, just over a half, and 50%, respectively.
Furthermore
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,
although
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the
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apply
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zero of
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household
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households
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have
box
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a box
the box
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for freezing,
the
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apply
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ownership surged tremendously over the years and reached its peak at 100% of
percentage
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the percentage
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of households in 2019, aligned with the
vacuum
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cleaner that
also
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climbed significantly.
However
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, where
washing
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the washing
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machine
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was
a
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the
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highest ownership before, it was have fluctuated condition before
increased
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increasing
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moderately at around 73%. Turning to
of
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apply
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the time
have been
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apply
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spent
of
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on
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housework
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, which accounted for 50
hours
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per
week
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;
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however
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however,
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the chart
fall
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fell
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drastically to 20
hours
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in 1960.
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, there was
climb
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a climb
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slightly in 2000 at around 16
hours
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per
week
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,
then
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diminished nineteenth years later at 10
hours
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of
housework
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per
week
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per
household
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, vacuum, household, housework, hours, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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