In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?
It is
being
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apply
a
Correct article usage
apply
forecast
that only individuals travelling Replace the word
forecasted
inside
Change preposition
in
the
cars, buses, and trucks without any drivers in the future Correct article usage
apply
that
can make drivers Correct pronoun usage
apply
lost
their jobs. From my perspective, I think the advantages did not outweigh the backwards because Wrong verb form
lose
this
scheme will Wrong verb form
benefit
benefits
those who are disabled and cannot Wrong verb form
benefit
drive
due to
health.
The negative point is that many individuals that
have a job being a driver could Correct pronoun usage
who
absent
because of the driverless thing. It cannot be Add a missing verb
be absent
imagine
how many households have to search Wrong verb form
imagined
new
Change preposition
for new
place
to work if Fix the agreement mistake
places
this
is happen
. Wrong verb form
happens
For instance
, in 2017, a paper from Correct article usage
a statistic
statistic
company Fix the agreement mistake
statistics
at
Medan, Indonesia, wrote that 20% of citizens in Medan earn from being a driver for Change preposition
in
living
.
Despite those backwards, Correct article usage
a living
driveless
could Correct your spelling
driverless
benefits
a lot of human Wrong verb form
benefit
kind
Change to a plural noun
kinds
such
as underprivillege
Correct your spelling
underprivileged
one
that should have company if want to go Correct pronoun usage
ones
to
anywhere because Remove the preposition
apply
the
lack of their body function. Change preposition
of the
Nonetheless
, the new technology will help them since they just have to sit inside the vehicles, so that they can travelling
all alone. To illustrate, one of my relatives Wrong verb form
travel
have
a leg paralysed condition that when Tesla, a car company, released about automatic driver, he immediately bought it because he Correct subject-verb agreement
has
want
to freely gone to anywhere.
The other one is that not everyone Wrong verb form
wanted
knew
how to Wrong verb form
knows
drive
, especially individuals that
have heart Correct pronoun usage
who
condition
because it will Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
make
themVerb problem
shock
shocked
. Correct word choice
apply
Additionally
, many of who
have Correct pronoun usage
those who
this
circumstances Correct determiner usage
these
felt
they are a burden because cannot go alone Wrong verb form
feel
on
their own vehicles. Change preposition
in
For instance
, the
survey done by Gadjah Mada University, Indonesia, in 2018Correct article usage
a
, wrote
33% of people Verb problem
showed that
suffers
from heart Wrong verb form
suffering
attack
need to practice how to Fix the agreement mistake
attacks
drive
again because they
afraid Add a verb
they are
they were
if
the Correct your spelling
of
episode
Fix the agreement mistake
episodes
come
when they face many vehicles at Verb problem
apply
all
once on the road. Correct determiner usage
apply
Additionally
, when someone that them to travel together, they will feel safe because they did
not have to Wrong verb form
do
drive
; however
, 13% of them want to chase
Verb problem
go on
journey
alone.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
a journey
although
there will be many of
households Change preposition
apply
leave
their jobs, the driverless project have more positive points because those who are disabled can Wrong verb form
leaving
travelling
alone, Change the verb form
travel
be travelling
then
people who are suffered
from heart condition Wrong verb form
suffer
did
not have to worry Wrong verb form
do
to take
themselves on a journey.Change preposition
about taking
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