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Task 1 the images below explains the process of how pollutants from modern life become acid rain that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain. summarise the information by selecting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

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The given picture-grams illustrate the process of how toxic wastes from modern life became acid rain, which
then
infect
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to
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apply
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the environment and the food chain. The point is the select
report
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and report
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 the main features and make comparisons where revealed. There are 4 stages in the whole process, starting from the pollutant's reasons and having them enter
food
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the food
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 chain. The first step involves
that
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what
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affected
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affects
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 the air going into the atmosphere which is hauling, transport, factories, power stations,
clouds
 absorb
pollutants
,
clouds
 laden with
pollutants
, hills and fields, trees and plants ,
river
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rivers
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 and lakers after that the
pollutants
 rise to
clouds
 and it is carbon dioxide, sulphur dioxide, nitrogen oxides, mercury and other compounds. After that the cloud
to absorb
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 to gases
in
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inside and
hold
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holds
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on
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onto
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 it. It started to move to another place. Once polluted
clouds
 cross countries and
considers
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consider
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,
asid
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acid
rain
felt
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fell
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 into the land. Meanwhile, when the rains
felt
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fell
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 down to land, it
have
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apply
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affected to
pollutants
enter
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entering
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food
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the food
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 chain. The final step is that land
affected
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is affected
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on
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by
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pollutants
.
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Task Response
Ensure all parts of the process are clearly and accurately described. Use appropriate vocabulary and grammar for process diagrams.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize information logically, using paragraphs to separate different stages of the process. Consider using connectives to show sequence and relationship between steps.
Supported Main Points
Expand on the main points by explaining how each stage leads to the next. Avoid repetition and ensure that you're not introducing new ideas without explaining their relevance to the process.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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