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The pie charts below show units of eletricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of eletricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the distribution of production of electric energy by 5 types of
source
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sources
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 used in France and Australia
such
 as Coal , Oil , Natural Gas , Hydropower and Nuclear power
in
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at
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 two different times
of
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in
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 the period 1980 and 2000.
To begin
 with , Australia where total units of production increased by 70 .
In contrast
,
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the manufactured
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manufactured
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manufacturing
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 of oil and natural gas decreased tenfold and
was
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were
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 equal
with
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to
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 each other . Meanwhile, the quantity of Hydropower
rosed
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rose
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 from 20 to 36 .
Also
, promotion observed in coal manufacturing began with 50 unity and culminated
130
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 .
Secondly
 , it was obvious that units of total manufacture doubled in 20 years . The significant
increasing
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 observed in nuclear manufacturing from 15 to 126 .
Likewise
 , the unity of making oil climbed by 5 . Opposite , in 2000 in France natural gas and hydro power
manufactured
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were manufactured
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 less by
comparising
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comparison
 in 1980 .
In addition
,
unity
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the unity
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 of manufacturing of coal
remain
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remains
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 the same ( 25 ) . Looking from the
overall
 perspective , the total production of fuel sources expanded the both of country .
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