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The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in australia

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in australia
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provide
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provides
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an illustrate
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illustrate
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illustration
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about
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of
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 the community stayed by four different
individuals
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staying
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apply
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, namely
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zoo
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the zoo
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,
library
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, theater and
cinema
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 in
Australia
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. All in all,
this
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proved
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 information about the
popularity
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 places by
individuals
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 who
born
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were born
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 in
Australia
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, new
migrants
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 in
english
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English
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countries
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 and new
migrants
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 born in
other country
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another country
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.
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, The
cinema
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its
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it's
it is
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most
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apply
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highest among
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the
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zoos
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zoo
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,
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library
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libraries
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 and
teather
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theatre
. Regarding various
individuals
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 staying in
Australia
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, the percentage of
the
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apply
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new
migrants
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 born in other
countries
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 who visited at
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the theater
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theater
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theatre
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the
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was the
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 lowest compared with the item places at 10%.
However
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,
in
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at
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 the same rate
who
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as
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 new
migrants
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 born in other
countries
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 at
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library
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the library
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the
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is the
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 highest
compered
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compared
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 with
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zoo
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the zoo
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,
cinema
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 and
teather
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teacher
 at
a
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apply
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half. In terms of
individuals
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who visited
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visited
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visit
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place
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places
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 in
Australia
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, the rate of people
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who visited
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visited
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visit
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at
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a
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cinema
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the cinema
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 who
born
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were born
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 in
Australia
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the
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is the
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 highest compared with
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the zoo
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zoo
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zoos
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,
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library
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libraries
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 and
teather
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teacher
 at around 70%.
Moreover
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, the
individuals
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 who
new
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knew
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migrant
migrants
migraine
migran
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Migran
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born
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were born
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 in
englis
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English
-speaking
countries
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 the highest
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compared
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compered
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compared
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 with other
item
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items
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 places at around 62%

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words individuals, zoo, library, cinema, australia, migrants, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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