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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside town of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside town of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
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The maps below
presents
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 the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. In 1990, the seaside had a much greener landscape with a lot
disposal
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of disposal
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 of trees and houses, but during the next 15
years
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 the seaside illustrated many changes. The most notable is that
large
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 number of individual houses were knocked down and replaced by residential in 2005.
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, trees were cut down and an airport
were
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 built in
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the north-west
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north-west
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northwest
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 of the school. By 2005, the factory had
constructed
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been constructed
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 in the west of
railway
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the railway
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 station. The number of residential habitats are experienced behind the ferry road and a new supermarket
were
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 expanded near these residential.
Overall
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, the comparison of the two maps
experienses
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experiences
experience
 with a change
of
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in
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 the mainly urban landscape.
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