The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary Schools since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the changes in infrastructure at
west
Correct your spelling
West Park Secondary Schools
park
secondary schools since its construction in year 1950.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that number
of changes Correct article usage
a number
had been
taken place Wrong verb form
have
such
as houses were
demolished into car Wrong verb form
being
park
Fix the agreement mistake
parks
as well as
size
of Add an article
the size
playground
Add an article
the playground
was
increased.
Unnecessary verb
apply
According to
the given data, houses were demolished into car park
and science Fix the agreement mistake
parks
block
in 1980, Fix the agreement mistake
blocks
while
in 2010 the area of car
Add an article
the car
park
has been
increased, but Verb problem
apply
science
block was in the same place. Correct article usage
the science
Moreover
, the school name have been
renamed and in 1980 and 2019 it Wrong verb form
was
is
Verb problem
became
a
main building of the educational institute.
Moving Correct article usage
the
further
, in the direction of southern and western there was a
farmland in 1950. Surprisingly, the sports field Remove the article
apply
have taken
the place of farmland in 1980. Wrong verb form
took
Furthermore
, area
of Correct article usage
the area
playground
has Correct article usage
the playground
been
decreased in the Unnecessary verb
apply
last
year. Lastly
, the main road run
in the northern direction which did not Wrong verb form
ran
changed
in the given time periods.Change the verb form
change
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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