The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.
The diagram compares
presentage
modern Correct your spelling
present
users
technology in the UK between 1966 and 2003.
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users'
user's
It is clear that
the proportion of CD players is significantly more than Internet access. As can be seen from the graph, Correct article usage
the precentages
precentages
of CD players steadily Correct your spelling
percentages
percentage
risen
between 1996 and 2003. But internet access only appeared in 1998 Wrong verb form
rose
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and than
than
rocketed in 1999. When internet access became available, Correct your spelling
then
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the amout
amout
of mobile Correct your spelling
amount
users
sharply increased.
In comparison with Mobile phone
, Home Fix the agreement mistake
phones
computer
сlimbing gradually. In 1999 and 2001 Fix the agreement mistake
computers
amout
of mobile phone Correct your spelling
amount
users
considerably increased. It is clear that
the amount
of gadget Change the quantifier
number
users
quickly increased for the entire period.Submitted by dnm.best on
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