The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.
The diagram compares
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present
modern
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technology in the UK between 1966 and 2003.
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the proportion of CD players is significantly more than Internet access. As can be seen from the graph,
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the precentages
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percentages
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of CD players steadily
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between 1996 and 2003. But internet access only appeared in 1998
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rocketed in 1999. When internet access became available,
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amout
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amount
of mobile
users
sharply increased. In comparison with Mobile
phone
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phones
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, Home
computer
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computers
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сlimbing gradually. In 1999 and 2001
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amount
of mobile phone
users
considerably increased.
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the
amount
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of gadget
users
quickly increased for the entire period.
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