Young people are much more aware of and concerned about issues like the environment, poverty, and animal welfare than previous generations. What is your own opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, the youth generations are more keen and perceptive toward several affairs
such
as those concerning the
environment
, poverty level, and animal protection in comparison to their preceding age groups. In my opinion, I agree that many of the younger
people
have a bigger interest
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the mentioned topics. In
this
essay, I will dissect the reasons behind them from my own experiences and views. To start with, the
environment
is currently one of the most discussed topics throughout social media
due to
the statements of many scientists posted on many platforms about the
possibly
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emerging climate change.
Consequently
,
this
planted worries and concerns
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the coming climate change in the youth’s minds, evidenced by the emergence of various
environment
and
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awareness campaigns. One of the possible
reason
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that made the youths to be more concerned about
this
affair is based on how they are the generation that will live the impact in their later stage of life. Meanwhile, the older generations are not as worried because some of them feel that they won’t live long enough to be affected by the adverse impact, even though they are the one who has done more
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the
environment
. The next discourse
that is
also
very popular is the attention towards the poor and financially unstable group of
people
.
For example
, the birth of various donation and social welfare start-up companies
such
as KitaBisa and campaign.com are enabling a considerable amount of
people
to be a fundraiser.
As a result
, many young
people
are now helping unfortunate
people
around them,
such
as their
neighbors
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that
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not have the resource and exposure to get help by simply posting the
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background and
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of the donations. Simultaneously, the new platform
also
help
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to ease the hassle for someone to donate their money
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others.
Lastly
, concerns regarding animal welfare and how to stop the abuse towards them are becoming more apparent
throughout
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youngsters
due to
the function of social media that enables
people
to record and upload any recordings to their
account
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accounts
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. To illustrate, there are accounts made to seek and expose the perpetrator of animal abuse through the uploading of
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recordings to give them social pressure and punishment.
Due to
the scale of the account, the persecution of the perpetrator can be quite harsh, often resulting in the animal abuser losing their job position.
However
, these accounts have raised
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awareness of how we should take care of other living creatures.
To conclude
, the presented examples showed backgrounds and catalysts of how the young generations are more aware of environmental,
people
, and animal welfare issues. It can be seen that what has been the catalyst for the surging awareness of the mentioned affairs above have similarities in terms of how the emergence of new mediums of information and platforms, enabled by the advancement of technologies
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what enabled younger
people
to have the opportunity to be more aware and act for the issues that they gravitate towards.
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