The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The following illustration demonstrates the
proccess
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process
of
the
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milk
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and dairy
products
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production. In an
overall
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context, the process consists of 7 main stages commencing with
grazing
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the grazing
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of cows and cumulating in the supply of the outputs to the customers. Examining the details, as the diagram the initial step is grazing of cows. After the grazing, as
a
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next
stage
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the cows provide the
milk
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twice a day, and the
products
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transfer to the dairy factory
in
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on
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a daily basis. Before delivering the obtained item through the
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tanker to the dairy , the
milk
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is maintained at the refrigeration storage. Shifting the focus to the final stages, the
milk
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is converted to
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multiple
products
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such
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as cheese, cream and butter or pasteurized and packaged
for providing
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to provide
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simple
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a simple
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milk
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product.
Furthermore
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,
at the end
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of each
these
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steps, the
products
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are delivered for
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consumption.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, products with synonyms.
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