The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates how many
foreigner
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foreigners
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spent time in Europe over the period of 1987 and 2007.
Overall
,
foreigner
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foreigners
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who spent time in the mountains were relatively stable throughout 1987 to 2007.
On the contrary
, foreign people who visited the coast and the lakes
were fluctuated
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fluctuated
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. People who visited the coast surged from 1992 to 2007,
while
those who visited the mountains experienced the largest ups and downs. In 1987, the coast witnessed the most foreign
visitors
at nearly 40
thousands
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. Since
then
, it has dipped in 1992 and rose afterwards to just above 70
thousands
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thousand
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.
On the other hand
, the lakes experienced the lowest
foreign
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number of foreign
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visitors
in
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at
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the beginning of the era, approximately
at
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10
thousands
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. The number rose until it reached
the
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its
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peak in 2002,
then
it decreased sharply until 2007.
In contrast
, the
mountains'
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number of
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foreign
visitors
did not
changed
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much from 1987 to 2007. The number slightly increased from 20
thousands
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thousand
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to around 25
thousands
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thousand
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visitors
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, thousands with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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