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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of anthropologists in work after 5 years

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of anthropologists in work after 5 years
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The pie chart gives information about what anthropology graduates did after they finished their undergraduate degree course,
while
 the table portrays the amount of money they earned after five years
in
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work
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the majority of anthropology
alumni
 worked as
a
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full-time
worker
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workers
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. Looking into more
details
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, the highest percentage of the graduates’ activities belonged to full-time
work
 and it reached 52%.
On the contrary
, only 5% of graduates became postgraduate students and did part-time
work
.
In addition
, there were 8% of
alumni
 who seemed to be unidentified. As can be seen from the table, there were three types of employment and four
range
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 of salary that
alumni
 earned after 5 years of
work
.
Government
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 sector was the only sector that enabled around 50% of
alumni
 to earn more than $100.000. In comparison, only 40% of
alumni
 who got a job as freelance consultants could get
the
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 salary of more than $100.000 and sadly only 30% of graduates who pursued
career
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 in private companies could get the same salary.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, alumni with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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