You are going to teach English to your friend’s child. Write a letter to your past English teacher to ask if you can borrow some books from him/her. In your letter tell your teacher about the child; say when and where you will teach the child; explain what books you would like to borrow.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
letter to you as I am interested in borrowing some English
books
from you for tutoring a grade 7 child. Actually, one of my friend's
son
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who studies in D.A.V school, Brampton, needs to have a personal teacher because he was unable to attend classes in
summers
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for 5 months
due to
hi
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his
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poor health conditions. Well, everyone
is having
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a very hectic schedule nowadays, but
still
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I have some spare time during the evenings as I was a teacher for 4 years in India. So, I think I can help him.
Moreover
,
library
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the library
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could be a good and
a
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peaceful place to teach him well.
Furthermore
, more
books
are available at
this
place if I
needed
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more help.
Therefore
, for a student
of
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grade 7, some
grammer
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grammar
books
and a dictionary
along with
his
text
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books
are going to be enough for me to
providing
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him a good tutoring. If you can lend me these materials, I would really
apppreciate
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appreciate
that. waiting for your reply. Yours
sicerely
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sincerely
, Nav
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greeting and closing
Ensure that the letter has a clear opening and closing statement. The closing statement was informal; consider a more formal tone to align with the purpose of the letter.
logical structure
Organize ideas in a logical and cohesive manner. Each paragraph should focus on a single topic. Make use of linking words to better connect ideas.
single idea per paragraph
Use a single idea per paragraph and expand on it fully. Some paragraphs contained multiple ideas which could be more coherently expanded.
complete response
Fully address all bullet points from the task. The letter can be further improved by providing specific details in response to the task such as the exact books needed, and confirming times more precisely.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a suitable and consistent tone throughout the letter. While formal in most parts, there are instances in the letter where the tone becomes too informal, such as 'waiting for your reply.' It should be more formal to reflect the letter's purpose.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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