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Recycling is a pointless activity, it is fraught with inefficiency. Governments need to develop policies to tackle waste and other issues at source. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

#activity #inefficiency #governments #policies #waste #source
Nowadays, many people adhere to the thought that recycling is
useless
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 activity, which
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 not help our environment and
autorities
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authorities
 ought to find ways to deal with waste.I totally agree that
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 of recycling
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 to be renovated and governments need to encourage
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 process. A good reason is ,
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 system should be developed , is high
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 impacts on our Earth
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 recycling.
Firstly
, in most countries , there is not an accurate plan ,
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 to cope with garbage in their countries. That's why litters are sent by ships overseas. By transporting to these countries , ships pollute
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 of
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kills many species of fish and other creatures.
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exist organisations
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 make money from illegal waste incineration, and organized criminals for whom waste traffic is almost as profitable as human trafficking. Another point to consider is that
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 will have positive consequences
due to
 recycling .By finding solutions how to deal with litter in a country, it would create new jobs, because people who can do the necessary work will be needed in new enterprises.
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, local
economities
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economies
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profit
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 it and the level of unemployment will decrease. In conclusion, recycling is
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 activity for humanity because
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 it, our
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emission
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 will be over sooner. In my opinion, advancements in recycling technology can improve sorting and processing efficiencies, making recycling more cost-effective and less energy-intensive, and potentially addressing many of the inefficiencies in the current systems.
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The essay structure needs to be more clearly defined with clear paragraphing and logical flow. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea supporting the main argument.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are present but could be improved in clarity and purpose. The introduction should clearly state your stance and outline the main points, while the conclusion should provide a summary and final thoughts.
coherence cohesion
Main points need better support with clear explanations and relevant examples. Avoid generalizations and ensure that each point directly relates to the overall argument of the essay.
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Ensure to answer all parts of the prompt comprehensively. While you have provided an opinion, it's important to explore the extent of agreement or disagreement with the given statement and examine other viewpoints.
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Ideas presented should be more comprehensively developed with a clearer structure. Use paragraphing effectively to separate different aspects of the argument.
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Incorporate more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. Use data, case studies, or hypothetical situations that are directly related to the topic to make your points more persuasive.

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