The maps below show the centre of a small town called (slip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called (slip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate the centre of a little
city
before and after
development
. Regarding the town before
development
, there is
road
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a road
the road
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on the northern
side
of the
city
called the main
road
and
this
road
is surrounded by shopping malls at the top and the bottom.
Moreover
, at the top of these shops is the
country
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countryside
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side
.
On the other hand
, I can see that there is a way from the main
road
to the southeast which is connected to a tiny park and there is another one which is connected to the school. In regard to the
city
after
development
, on the northern
side
of
this
city
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city,
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there is a Bus station, Shopping centre and car park.
In addition
, there is a wide range of shops at the centre of the
city
which is separated from the top by the pedestrian cross. On the other
side
of the coin, there is a large number of housing and small parks on the eastern
side
of
this
city
. All of these places which I mentioned are surrounded by
road
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roads
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.
At the end
, there is a school on the southern
side
which is outside
side
the
city
.
Overall
, even though
city
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the city
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after
development
has a lot more facilities, there are some places which are common between these two maps.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, development, road, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • town centre
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • residential
  • commercial
  • pedestrian
  • amenities
  • refurbishment
  • green spaces
  • public transport
  • conservation
  • modernization
  • facilities
  • expansion
  • renovation
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