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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The
chart
 illustrates the proportion of the world
population
 and the distribution of revenue by region.
Overall
, it can be seen that North America and Europe are the richest meanwhile India and Africa don’t possess much revenue. It can be seen from the
chart
 that North America are the
most
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apply
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wealthiest since
their
Correct pronoun usage
its
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population
only
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is only
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 over 5% but
their
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its
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 global
wealth
 is at nearly 35% which is
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
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 in the
chart
. It is
also
 clear that
rich
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the rich
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 Asian -
Pacific’s
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Pacific
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 holds just below 25% of Global
wealth
,
holds
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and holds
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 2nd place on the
chart
 proportionally. The
chart
 shows that India and Africa
has
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have
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 the least amount of
wealth
 since 15% of
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the world
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world
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world's
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population
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 Indian and 10 %
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 African and their
wealth
 distribution
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 nearly 0%. It can be concluded
in
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from
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 the graph that proportionally, China is the poorest since
Chinese
Correct article usage
the Chinese
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 are just below 25% of the World
population
 but they only have below 5% revenue.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, population, wealth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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