Nowadays, education overseas has become more accessible and growing numbers of people send their offspring to study in other countries. However, this trend has its detractors. I strongly believe that the pros far outweigh the cons, and will examine both below.

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Studying abroad is an investment by parents in their children. It brings many values ​​and benefits to future generations.
However
, many
people
now consider it a trend that many
people
follow Studying abroad is an issue that many student mothers are concerned about because it is related to their children's education or employment. Young
people
studying abroad can
also
pose many risks,
such
as being discriminated against between locals and foreigners. Being discriminated against when studying abroad is not a strange problem because it is
also
a situation
that is
happening in many Asian countries
such
as Japan...
Besides
, young
people
also
have to face discrimination. vulnerable to fraud or crime because they live far from home without parental supervision and education, and
Japan
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also
where the crime rate of Vietnamese
people
is very high. Studying abroad is
also
very expensive, causing many families to have to borrow money so their children can have a better living and studying environment.
In addition
, studying abroad you need to face many problems
such
as adapting to the living environment, being scammed
as well as
pressure from family. When studying abroad, they have to go through many difficulties, but it
also
brings many benefits to them,
such
as being proficient in a second language. Being proficient in multiple languages can improve their competitiveness. compete in the job market, bringing advantages to themselves. Studying abroad
also
helps you open your eyes, live more independently, and adapt better.
Besides
, studying abroad
also
helps them get good jobs and have more
experiences
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, thereby helping them be more successful on their own path to adulthood. Studying abroad
also
helps them raise awareness about society and many other issues in a newer, clearer way. Studying abroad helps you gain new knowledge, have a more multi-dimensional perspective on the life around you, and
also
helps you have more achievements to contribute to your home country. We can take a specific example like Mr. Nguyen Minh Viet studied abroad in Japan and when he returned home, he worked as a bridge engineer for a Japanese software company in Vietnam. Later, he founded Green Sun to work on software. ERF and multilingual translation.
However
, in general, studying abroad is still a good choice to develop one's abilities in the future.
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Clearly address the prompt by discussing advantages and disadvantages in a more balanced manner. Provide comprehensive ideas supported by examples. Make sure the conclusion summarises your view or restates the overall balance of pros and cons.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scholarships
  • financial aid
  • diverse range
  • exposure
  • globalization
  • facilitated
  • application processes
  • broadening the horizon
  • brain drain
  • negatively impacting
  • cultural shock
  • isolation
  • outweigh
  • mental health
  • adjustment issues
  • reliance
  • undermine
  • domestic educational institutions
  • cultural identity
  • heritage
  • invaluable
  • fostering
  • global citizens
  • diverse cultures
  • perspectives
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