The two diagrams below describe changes to a museum's floor plan between 2008 and 2012.
The rendered map illustrates the changes that occurred in the infrastructure of
museum
floor in 2008 and 2012.
Correct article usage
the museum
Overall
, it is clearly seen that a number of facilities have been added to the museum floor plan such
as a lift, exhibition area
, reading room and others.
According to
the given data, in 2012, the main entrance hall was constructed along with
the terrace while
the walking path was unchanged. Moreover
, the gallery as well as
the shop is in the same place
. Therefore
, the area
of reception has become smaller. Also
, the reception was shifted to restaurants. Furthermore
, new facilities were added to the infrastructure of the museum in 2012 such
as an exhibition place
and self-service cafe along with
a lift in the eastern direction.
Moving further
, children's
play Correct article usage
the children's
area
has taken the place
of cloak
Correct article usage
the cloak
area
and the stairs have vanished. Lastly
, the reading place
was introduced in the same place
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