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Write a letter to your professor about you recent internship and future plans after graduation. In letter Thank him tell about your duties at internship Share your plans after graduation

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to express
gratitute
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gratitude
 regarding the
soccour
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soccer
succour
 that I received during my study period from you.With your guidance, I have secured a position as a machine operator at RDJ
bakeries
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, and without your help it was impossible.
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, I am very thankful for
you
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 support. My
job
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 duties include many tasks that I had learnt during lab
session
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sessions
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for
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, for
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 instance, professional document making of tasks performed during my shift.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,
to ensure
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 the efficient working of
machine
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the machine
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 is
in
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on
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list
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 of my
job
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 duties.
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, a paid training week is
also
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 part of my internship. Undoubtedly,
this
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 co-op will be helpful in providing me
enough
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with enough
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 experience to get a
job
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 after graduation. I have made
decision
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the decision
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of continuing
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to continue
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 my
job
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 after graduation in
this
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 company until I
will
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receive a more promising
job
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 offer , and owing to the salary and benefits included in
contract
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the contract
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 I have made
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 decision.I hope
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 opportunity will give
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 direction to my career. Once again , I am very thankful to you for providing me with favourable direction and your precious time. I look forward to hearing back from you. Yours faithfully, Gill
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure the letter has a clear and logical structure. The introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion should be distinct and flow smoothly from one to the other.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use separate paragraphs for each of your points: expressing thanks, detailing your internship, and discussing your future plans. This will help in organizing your ideas more clearly.
Task Achievement
While your response addresses the task given, ensure that each point is expanded with sufficient detail and developed fully to give a complete answer to the task. Avoid any unrelated information.
Task Achievement
The tone of gratitude and formality is well achieved through polite language and formal address. Keep this consistent throughout any formal correspondence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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