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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie graph illustrates the differences between Japanese and
Malaysian
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Malaysians
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 in family spending namely, Housing, Transport,
Food
,
Health
 care
an
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and
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 Other
goods
 and services over a period
10
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of 10
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 years. It can be seen from the graph that, the percentages of expending of Housing and
Food
 in Malaysia were higher than
Japan
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in Japan
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. Japanese
resisdent
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resident
residents
expensed
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spent
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 the largest of their budget on Other
goods
 and services
while
 Malaysian citizens spent
the
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apply
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most of their money on housing. In terms of Japan, they spend the most on Other
goods
 and
service
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services
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was
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29% and only 6% for
Health
 care. From that, it can be inferred that they do not spend much on
health
. The second was
Food
 with 24% and Housing with 21% for 3rd place and the 4th with 20% that was Transport Regarding the data of Malaysia, they have a different way of spending compared to Japan. Malaysian
expenditured
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expenditure
expenditures
 a lot for Housing with 34% and next is 26% for
Food
. They
paymented
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paid for
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 Other
goods
 and services was 26% and 10% for Transport. The
last
 one was
Health
 care with only 3 %.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, health, goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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