The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts indicate the proportion of budget spent on
household
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households
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in
Japan
compared to
Malaysia
in 2010 based on five categories, namely housing, transport, food, health care and other goods and services.
Overall
, all countries spent the most on housing, transport, food and other goods and services. By
contrase
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contrast
, the percentage of spending on health care was the lowest. It can be seen from the chart that around 34% of
the
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Malaysia
’s budget was spent on housing.
This
figure took up over one-third of the total cost
while
it was just over one-fifth in Japa, at 21%. Transport in
Japan
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twice
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as
many
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as in
Malaysia
on
an
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average. As
in
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illustrated by the graph, food expenditure in
Malaysia
accounted for 27% was slightly higher than that of
Japan
with
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24%. In terms of different goods and services,
Japan
spent
at
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around 29% which was 3% more than that of
Malaysia
.
Finally
, the comparison of spending on health care doubled in
Japan
, at 6%
rhan
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than
the figure for
Malaysia
at only 3%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, malaysia with synonyms.
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