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一部の国では、人々にとって家を借りるよりも所有することが非常に重要です。なぜこのようなことが起こるのでしょうか? これはプラスの状況だと思いますか、それともマイナスの状況だと思いますか?

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perspective
 of
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accepting
 bad situations
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 as unsatisfactory work and lack of money is often similar to a sense of realism and resignation. The perspective shows that by accepting
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 a situation, individuals can find satisfaction and avoid the stress of constant effort.
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, people with jobs that are not ideal may focus on positive aspects.
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 as stable income and work-life balance rather than negative aspects.
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 an approach can bring a sense
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of
 peace w and stability, especially in uncertain times.
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, the belief that you strive to improve your
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situation
 is similar to a sense of independence. It
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 the idea
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that
 individuals have the power
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 change their situation through effort.
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approach
 leads to great
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 and life
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improvement
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, there is a possibility that people who are dissatisfied with the economic situation can
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 a more fulfilling and rich life by going on to higher education or changing jobs. My way of thinking is close to the latter approach. It is important to accept it, especially in situations where you
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 do anything about it ,but I believe in the value of working hard to improve.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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  • communicate
  • cognitive skills
  • cultural awareness
  • opportunities
  • globalized world
  • job market
  • interact
  • linguistic abilities
  • cultural exchange
  • language proficiency
  • language barrier
  • foreign travel
  • personal growth
  • academic achievement
  • self-confidence
  • enhance
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