The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.
The maps below illustrate how Queen Mary Hospital
have
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changed since its construction in 1960 So it is clear to see, that
map
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had
became
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from
regular
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a regular
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street to
fully
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medical place. First of all, in 1960 there
had
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been shopping
centre
and farmland, that had replaced with
cancer
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a cancer
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centre
, pharmacy and
nurse
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school in nineteen eighty.
It
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also
noticeable, that the only things that
had
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not changed
was
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car
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park and
main
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road.
Also
,
instead
of 4
similarly
by size buildings there had been five.
Shopping
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centre
had kicked off and had turned into 2 new constructions. The biggest changes on the map, for one time period for sure, had been in two
thousands year
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.
The one
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of the most noticeable
thing
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had been
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parking. It had turned about twice smaller.
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of half of
car
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the car
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station
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it had placed a little nursing school. For that place, we can see the biggest building
for
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all the maps, which is
cancer
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the cancer
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centre
that
had grew
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has grown
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into almost half of the map
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, instead".
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renovation
  • expansion
  • modernization
  • facilities
  • departments
  • adjacent structures
  • patient care
  • medical technology
  • specialized centers
  • eco-friendly initiatives
  • initial layout
  • construction
  • extensions
  • improvements
  • community health services
  • capabilities
  • repurposing
  • developments
  • efficiency
  • upgrades
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