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Students in university should be specialized in one subject rather than to develop a wider range of knowledge in many different subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #university #range #subjects
Some people may hold the opinion that college students are better trained
with
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 a particular subject
instead
 of
master
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 various disciplines with exclusive knowledge. I’m strongly against
with
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the
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 view. First and foremost, mono-knowledge is not applicable in the real
word
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world
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. In the workplace, the employer
appreciate
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 people with multi-knowledge in several areas.
For instance
, the requirements for
the
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recruiting
of
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a teaching assistant in
a
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 institution are diverse, including
the
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teaching skills,
the
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effieiency
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efficiency
 of administrative
works
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work
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,
the
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communication skills, and even managing abilities. In an elementary school, the professors are multi-skills as well.
Like an
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 English teacher should
also
 have certain knowledge
in
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 Chinese since languages are highly connected with each other.
And a
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 specialist in chemicals may
also
 participate in the training of mathematics.
Besides
, the master of multiple knowledge in
a versatile subjects
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versatile subjects
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 is
favorable
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 for our growth and development. In
this
 day and age, we are facing new challenges and opportunities.
Single subject
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 learning is outdated
in
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 some degree, for the majority of us may not focus on a single area for the rest of our
life
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lives
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.
For example
, a large
amount
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 of teachers altered their career path to overseas sales and Youtubers in the past few years because of the policy and limitations announced by the government.
Furthermore
, when it comes to a new environment, a wider range of skills enable us to live better in the future. All in all, focusing on a preferred and compulsory subject is crucial, but all-round learning should not be neglected in any
cases
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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