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92.The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

92.The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph illustrates the 10 countries which consumed and produced the most
electricity
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 in 2014.
Overall
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,
consumption
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 and
production
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 of
electricity
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 are very similar in every
country
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.
While
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 China and the United States are the ones that consume produce and use the most. China is the
country
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 that had the highest
electricity
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production
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, and
consumption
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, with 5,398
billion
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kWh
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 and 5,322
billion
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kWh
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 respectively, which are around 1,300
billion
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kWh
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 and 1,400
billion
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kWh
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 higher than the second-ranked
country
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, namely the United States, producing 4,099
billion
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kWh
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 and consuming 3,866
billion
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kWh
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. Russia ranked
third,
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but it had only one-fourth of the
kWh
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 produced and consumed by the United States. Japan and India's
electricity
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production
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 and
consumption
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 were between 940
billion
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kWh
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 and 700
billion
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kWh
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, ranking fourth and fifth. Germany is the only
country
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 that has more
consumption
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 than
production
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; producing 526.6
billion
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kWh
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 and consuming 582.5
billion
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kWh
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.
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, the other countries have a similar amount of
production
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 and
consumption
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, which is between 620
billion
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kWh
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 and 450
billion
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kWh
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, consumption, production, country, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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