Students at university often have a choice of places to live. Some prefer to live on the campus dormitories while others choose to live in apartments in the community. Where would you prefer to live? Give reasons and specific details to support your preference
University
students
may come from various backgrounds and different countries, especially if the university itself is quite popular with international students
. One of the important points for the students
before starting the semester is choosing suitable accommodation. The Majority of students
prefer to live in the dormitory as it is usually quite affordable and nearby
the campus. Correct your spelling
near
However
, I believe leasing an apartment
is more
preferable since it is not restricted by dorm rules and gives easier access to facilities and activities in the community.
Living in Correct quantifier usage
apply
own-leased
Correct article usage
an own-leased
apartment
clearly gives more flexibility for students
. Unlike in dormitories, there is
no restricting rules Change the verb form
are
such
as curfews thus
students
can utilize and manage their time more creatively than living in dormitories. Students
may also
find this
benefit attractive since they can actively do part-time work or spend more time for
research or their thesis outside campus.
Change preposition
on
In addition
, by living in an apartment
outside campus, students
can access various facilities and activities offered in the community. It is beneficial especially for international students
since they can directly learn and immerse themselves in the local culture on a daily basis. Students
can also
quickly learn the local language while
living in the community. They can also
gain insightful experience from being involved in a community’s activities such
as local festivities.
In summary, although
living in dormitories may have its perks, living in an apartment
provides more diverse advantages for students
. Living in apartments will certainly give beneficial and impactful experiences for the students
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