115.Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entretainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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