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Do you think consumers should avoid over packaged products or it is the responsibility of producer to avoid extra packaging of products? Give your views or any relevant example with your own experience

#consumers #products #responsibility #producer
Majority
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 of the population
are preferring
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 to buy goods
through
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online rather than offline shopping considering their busy life. It is the
responsibility
 of the
producer
 to deliver the items without damage. Packaging the products considering the different modes of shipment and handling diverse unforeseen situations, packaging needs to be done in multiple layers to avoid issues.
This
over packaging
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over-packaging
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 is causing more issues to
environment
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the environment
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 as it is very difficult to diminish the waste considering the volume of
packages
 delivered each day. My personal view is that both
consumer
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consumers
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 and
producer
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producers
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 should consider reducing the
packages
 and
thus
 help
reducing
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reduce
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 the hazardous impact on the environment.
Firstly
, my personal view is that it is the
responsibility
 of
producer
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the producer
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 to assess the packaging requirement based on the category of the product. If the item does not need
over packaging
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over-packaging
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, they should try to reduce
layers
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the layers
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 that support the item.
For example
, Glass or ceramic items may need extra support during
transition
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the transition
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 which needs
over packaging
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. Producers should work towards taking the outer
packages
 after delivery from the customers which they can reuse
it
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later for another shipment.
Secondly
, it is
also
 the
responsibility
 of the consumer to save
the
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nature. Consumers cannot completely avoid ordering the goods considering the oversized packaging.
This
 may solve the problem in question in
this
 digital era. I have observed in one of the shopping portals that, they are providing the option to choose one shipment for all items they ordered. Consumers should choose
this
 option wherever possible so that the number of
packages
 will be reduced. They should give preference to vendors who are providing these kinds of options. To summarize, it is not only the
responsibility
 of the
producer
 but
also
 the
responsibility
 of the consumer to help reduce oversized packaging with the possible options. Government, NGOs and concerned authorities are responsible for creating awareness to avoid
over packaging
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over-packaging
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 for saving our mother
earth
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Earth
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.
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