The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows male and female
gym
membership over a thirty-year
period
. The vertical axis represents the
number
of
members
in units of 1000. The horizontal axis represents the
period
from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, the
number
of
gym
memberships
fluctuated over the past thirty
years
. All male
gym
memberships
increased and decreased extremely over the
period
, and all female
gym
memberships
slightly increased and decreased over the year. The highest
number
of male
gym
memberships
was in 2005, and the lowest
number
of male
gym
memberships
was in 2010.
On the other hand
, the highest and lowest numbers of female
gym
memberships
were in 1980 and 1995. In 1980, the
number
of male
gym
members
almost doubled over five
years
. After that, it decreased dramatically
less
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than 2000
members
from 1995 to 2000 over the
period
.
In contrast
, the lowest
number
of female
members
was half that of male
members
in 1980, and it rose slightly over the next thirty
years
.
Then
the highest
number
of
members
was over ten
years
from 1995 to 2005, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gym, period, number, members, memberships, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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