The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows male and female
gym
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membership over a thirty-year
period
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. The vertical axis represents the
number
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of
members
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in units of 1000. The horizontal axis represents the
period
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from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, the
number
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of
gym
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memberships
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fluctuated over the past thirty
years
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. All male
gym
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memberships
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increased and decreased extremely over the
period
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, and all female
gym
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memberships
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slightly increased and decreased over the year. The highest
number
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of male
gym
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memberships
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was in 2005, and the lowest
number
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of male
gym
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memberships
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was in 2010.
On the other hand
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, the highest and lowest numbers of female
gym
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memberships
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were in 1980 and 1995. In 1980, the
number
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of male
gym
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members
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almost doubled over five
years
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. After that, it decreased dramatically
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than 2000
members
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from 1995 to 2000 over the
period
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.
In contrast
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, the lowest
number
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of female
members
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was half that of male
members
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in 1980, and it rose slightly over the next thirty
years
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.
Then
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the highest
number
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of
members
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was over ten
years
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from 1995 to 2005, respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gym, period, number, members, memberships, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • membership trends
  • male and female comparison
  • notable increase/decrease
  • fluctuations
  • consistently
  • peak points
  • divergent patterns
  • parallels in trends
  • correlation
  • timeframe
  • cultural shifts
  • awareness of fitness
  • significant differences
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