the chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. the table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. summarize the information and make the comparison. write at least 150 words.

the chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. the table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. summarize the information and make the comparison. write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart and the table illustrate different modes of employment and education of university graduates of the anthropology department chosen after their graduation and compare their incomes in different sectors after five years.
Overall
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, it is evident that a large proportion of the graduated
students
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are now working as full-time employees and only 5% of
students
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chose to work as a part-timer and study at the same time. In the comparison of their incomes, a lot of anthropology graduates are earning more than 75000
dollars
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.
To begin
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with, almost 72% of the
students
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started to work after their graduation either part-time or full-time.
While
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few graduates chose to pursue their post-graduate education, at least 12% of them remained unemployed and there was no information about 8% of the
students
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. When it comes to their employment in different sectors, there are only a few employees who work for less than 75000
dollars
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as freelancing consultants and government officers
while
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more than 45% of the private organisation workers earn less than 75000
dollars
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.
However
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, 50% of the employees in the government sector earn more than 100000
dollars
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which dominates all other companies.
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