In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talents is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays everybody can be famous
by
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their
talents
and
skills
and
the
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technology supports enormously to become
success
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a success
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within
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overnight.
As a result
, some
people
have real
talents
but they
not
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do not
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become well-known,
affulent
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affluent
and not
appreciate
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by
arts
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lovers. I agree with
this
statement for the following reasons.
To begin
with,
skills
and
talents
are unique.
People
should support and encourage
folks
who have genuine
talents
in order to they will
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to
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in
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their
career
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. Some
people
can easily
popular
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among society but they do not have real
talents
,
people
also
blindly support them whatever they do,
consequently
, the real skilled
person
can be affected by
this
.
For instance
, in India
everyboday
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everyone
has
own
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their own
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youtube
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YouTube
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channel; they are famous and celebrity
within
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overnight but they do not have any
skills
and
talents
but they are well-known and rich.
This
trent
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trend
affects real
talent
folks
because
people
do not like to watch and
appriciare
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appreciate
the
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rteal
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real
skills
.
Furthermore
,
talented
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person
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main motive is not gaining money; he wants to show up his
talent
and needs
appreciations
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in order to he will enhance his
skills
,
however
, normal
folks
are whatever they do
consistanly
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consistently
,
people
are
manupulated
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manipulated
and influenced by their activity is a
skills
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,
as a consequence
, the skilled
person
does not have a chance to recognised by
folks
.
therefore
, real
talents
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talented
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people
not becoming famous.
To conclude
, anyone can become famous is a good thing but the real
talent
people
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of people
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should be recognised and
appriciated
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appreciated
by
people
and they have a chance to become
affulant
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affluent
by their
talent
.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with
this
statement the skilled
person
should gain everything
what
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he likes and wants like fame and money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratization
  • diversity
  • hidden talents
  • traditional avenues
  • prevalence
  • misconception
  • instant fame
  • dedication
  • oversaturated market
  • quantity overshadows quality
  • gatekeeping
  • inclusive
  • consumer preferences
  • artistic merit
  • entertainment value
  • marketing
  • public relations
  • public perception
  • true talent
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